I was sitting there under my tree with the boy I had formed an alliance with. I was very tired after I had a brief night’s sleep where I dreamed of the dull brown fields of District 11. Suddenly out of the corner if my eye, I saw a bright flash in my eye. As I stared at the UFO type object it seemed like a silver trash bag with a small box on the end. I showed it to my friend and we stared at the bright and shining object and decided if it was safe to open it. I smelled it to see if it reeked of poison, but it seemed to smell like cardboard. Then I opened he package and to be honest, I was very scared that the package might be a bomb or something dangerous that another tribute sent to try and kill me. Out of the box popped a brand new camera with a note. It was from a sponsor and they expressed their anger about how I had not killed anyone and my lack of competition. So to hopefully boost my motivation, they let me film a video and send it back to my parents. This did seem to help me because it took off the effects of homesickness.
Good job joe! I wonder if you would want to tell your parents if you were afraid of anything. Maybe adding that information would have made this a little bit better. Work it Bill!